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One more short story. Hello and thank you for

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joining me again on One More Short Story with

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me, Chris Fullwell, where we showcase a variety

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of stories from the world of writing battle.

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Now, if you're someone who's been sent this and

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you don't take part in writing battle yourself,

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but you're interested, it is genuinely my favourite

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writing competition and it's well, well worth

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a look. It's a great community and the whole

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process is just the right kind of bonkers and

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lots of fun. So looking forward to sharing these

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stories with you today. Now, I've put these two

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together based on a theme. Now, not as simple

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as... say a genre like horror or sci -fi or fantasy

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etc etc but rather the theme of inevitability

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what must happen what could happen what should

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not happen and the two stories we've got explore

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that really really well in very very different

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ways now to kick things off first of all we've

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got will this cycle last forever by Maverick

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Jones. It's a sword and sorcery story from the

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last short story battle. The other two prompts

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were antique store and unifier. That would certainly

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have me scratching my head, but not Maverick.

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They have done a really, really, really strong

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job here. I think it's a very clever story. I

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think it's probably one of the most intricate

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and intelligent stories I've come across on Writing

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Battle. It's a real treat. I think you're going

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to enjoy it. I have to give a shout out to Sam

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James for organising the audio on this. Sam had

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done this long before this podcast was a thing.

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He'd sorted it out for Maverick to publish on

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the Writing Battle site. So thank you, Sam, for

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that. Without further ado, here we go. We have

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Will This Cycle Last Forever? Written and narrated

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by Maverick Jones. Will this cycle last forever

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by Maverick Jones? The wall touching the sky

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camouflaged Elizabeth's surroundings, yet she

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could see the beast clear as day. Draped in shadows,

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its sharp claws dug into the dirt, looking for

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stable ground. But the bone jutting from its

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leg made that impossible. It slipped on its own

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blood, yelping in pain. Elizabeth adjusted her

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stance, mud squelching beneath her boot, and

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readied her sword. Though she tasted victory,

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she could not let her guard down. It was her

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or the beast. She had to win. Her thumb pressed

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against the fire ruby. at the base of her sword's

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hilt. The blade blazed with a fire impervious

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to the water drowning the earth around her. The

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beast roared in defeat. The emerald pendant around

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its neck oscillated with the wind, and its onyx

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eyes glistened. It bowed its head, accepting

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its fate. She wouldn't waste this opportunity.

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With all her strength, She sprinted head -on,

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leaped into the air, and decapitated the monster

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trapping everyone inside. You must break the

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pattern today, or the loop will repeat tomorrow.

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Elizabeth awoke once again at Rosetta's inn.

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She gazed out the sole window next to her bed.

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Her shoulders sagged at the dark grey clouds

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engulfing the sky. The same weather as yesterday,

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and all the days before, the cycle had repeated.

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The room was no different either. Cracked masonry

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strained against the pounding rain, and the ceiling

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still leaked by the dresser with the broken mirror.

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Elizabeth tiptoed around the scattered glass.

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the worn wood creaking with each step. She picked

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clothes at random from the piled mess on the

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floor, black trousers, tunic, and a hooded cape.

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Combing through her unruly red hair, she deftly

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twisted it into a single braid and strapped her

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sword around her waist. Throwing her hood up,

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she walked out her room. Elizabeth was grateful

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she was near the back door. She hated seeing

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the shell Rosetta had turned into, a lost soul.

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They lined the streets, unbothered by the pelting

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rain. Their charcoal bodies buzzed when Elizabeth

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walked past. Not from their mouths, but their

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soul yearning for anything to nurture it. Where

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their eyes once stood now held a black hole,

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a mark of failure from the beast. Nothing exists

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within them. She trudged along the path, averting

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her gaze from the lost souls. They avoided her

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too. She stopped at Jace's magical emporium and

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went inside. Jace stood in the same spot behind

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the counter, cleaning the Veritas mirror, a relic

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from the 5th century. Though his white hair was

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wild, his robe was neatly tied with no crinkles,

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and his poise held the utmost elegance. No luck,

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I gather, Jace asked without looking up. Besides

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herself and the beast, only their encounters

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changed with each cycle. It's still today, isn't

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it? Jace rolled his eyes at her grumbling tongue.

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What went wrong this time? I took too long, Elizabeth

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said. I was midway up the wall when midnight

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struck. She fixed him with a determined look.

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I need the lightning topaz. You've tried that

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stone already, remember? It intensified the electromagnetic

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field and you fried your heart. I know, but it'll

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give me more time to think. I'm certain I can

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avoid getting struck. Jace stared at her with

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a deadpan expression. Please, it'll work this

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time. I know it. She lied. He sighed. Jace placed

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the Veritas mirror next to the empty velvet cushion

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in the main display case. Next to the late 19th

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century cash register was a wooden box which

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held the elemental gem collection. Each stone

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carried a different ability. Though powerful

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without magic, Elizabeth needed the extra confidence.

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Jace picked up the bright yellow stone. He waved

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his hand and whispered, The crystal hummed to

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life. Elizabeth felt the hairs on her arms stand

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up. Taking the topaz from Jace's outstretched

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hand, she placed it at the base of her sword.

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Once there, the blade sizzled with electricity.

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Thank you, Elizabeth smiled at him. I'll see

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you tomorrow. Jace pressed his lips into a thin

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line and gave a single nod as a reply. Wasting

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no further time, Elizabeth hurried out the door.

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We must break the pattern today. Elizabeth was

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winning with ease. Using the horrendous weather,

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she brought the beast to a heel faster than ever.

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It woofered with each electric twitch, which

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bolstered Elizabeth's determination. One more

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strike, then I can climb. As she raised her sword

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once more, a voice carried through the wind,

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quiet, soft, and pleading. Why are you hurting

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me? She froze. Elizabeth looked at the beast,

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really looked, and saw its eyes heavy with pain

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beyond their battles. They held the torment weight

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of a thousand cycles. In her hesitation, the

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beast charged and swiped her with its claws.

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Numb, she watched her legs fly in the opposite

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direction of her head. Her blood mixed with mud.

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As life left her body, she clung to her lost

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thought. Is it a prisoner too? Elizabeth shot

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up from her bed, panting. Her fingertips brushed

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the faint scars on her stomach. The beast's words

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echoed in her mind. All these cycles, every battle,

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she never thought of the beast. Guilt clutched

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her heart at her selfish mindset. With newfound

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curiosity, she ran out of the room, failing to

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notice how the ceiling no longer leaked. A thick

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fog laid over the streets, penetrated only by

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the lost soul's eyes. No longer black holes,

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they pierced the world with a brilliant white

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light. All of them followed Elizabeth as she

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went straight to the beast. Seeing it in the

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clouded light of day, it did not appear nearly

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as ferocious. The emerald pendant around its

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neck glistened. Taking on its usual stance, the

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beast let out a menacing roar. Elizabeth unsheathed

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her sword, then stuck the blade into the ground.

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She held her arms out. Don't worry, she said.

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I won't hurt you. The beast charged and bit her

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head clean off. You must break. I don't know

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what you expected, Jay scoffed. There's a reason

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it isn't called the Cuddly Teddy Bear. You weren't

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there, Elizabeth paced back and forth. The tone

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in its voice, how broken it looked. We're all

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broken, he crossed his arms. That's why we're

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stuck here, remember? Of course, I just... She

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sighed. There's got to be a way to break the

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cycle without... Killing it, right? Jace's dark

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eyes hardened. No, he said. There isn't. Killing

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the beast is the only way. Elizabeth's eyes narrowed.

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Wasn't he always telling her to think outside

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the box? She watched him with a weary expression.

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Which will you take this time? He asked, pretending

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to sort through the gems. As she contemplated,

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her gaze landed on the empty velvet cushion in

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the display case. She squinted. She never noticed

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it had an outline of a pendant necklace. Her

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eyes widened. What is it? Jace tapped his fingers

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against the box. You. Elizabeth whispered. You

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did this. What? You created the cycle. She slammed

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her fist. The glass case shattered. You gave

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the beast the earth pendant. It was you! Jace's

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face morphed with guilt. Elizabeth, please, let

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me... In one swift motion, Elizabeth unsheathed

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her sword and decapitated him. The Pattern Today

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Elizabeth did not get out of bed the next cycle,

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or the following one. She briefly wondered if

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this is how lost souls formed, and quickly found

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she did not care. Jace, her companion, her friend.

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Why would he do this? Why wouldn't he break the

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cycle? Loneliness crept in and buried its anger

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into her heart. While she laid, her thoughts

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drifted through each cycle she lived through.

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The breakthroughs, the setbacks, the immense

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pressure to break it. Why me? Why do I have to

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do this? What makes me so fucking special? It's

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exhausting trying to save everyone. Save everyone.

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Elizabeth sat up. She looked out the window at

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the light gray clouds where a ray of sunlight

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quietly broke through. She quickly dressed and

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ran out without her sword. She knew what she

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needed to do. Elizabeth busted into Jace's magical

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emporium. Jace stood behind the counter with

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a weak expression. A faint scar lined his neck.

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Elizabeth, we can do apologies later, she said.

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Right now, I need your help. He cocked an eyebrow.

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Elizabeth marched up to the counter. I need the

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Veritasmir and the heart quartz. Elizabeth paid

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no mind to Jace's puzzled face. He eyed her up

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and down while he handed her the mirror and fetched

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the crystal. Is that all? He murmured, his eyes

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avoiding hers. There's one more thing. You. Jace

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flashed her a bewildered look. What? Me? He stammered.

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But I... There's no time to explain. We have

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to go now. Without waiting for a reply, Elizabeth

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grabbed his hand. Together they ran out the door.

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The lost souls wailed while they ran down the

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street and into the forest. The wind mixed with

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their howls as they drew closer to the wall.

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Elizabeth, Jace panted. It was clear he wasn't

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the athletic sort. This, this isn't going to

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work. It will. No. He retched his hand from hers.

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You, you don't understand. Jace's eyes gleamed

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with tears. I didn't mean to build this. It was

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easier not having that piece constantly screaming

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inside my head. I just wanted it to stop. But

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once they started to turn, he gazed back towards

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the town. I realized my mistake. I tried to break

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the cycle, but I... He choked. I couldn't. I

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failed, Elizabeth. It won't work. Elizabeth pulled

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him into a hug. Hot tears dripped onto her shoulder.

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You're right, she said. You couldn't break it.

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Neither could I. But together, she squeezed his

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hand. We can. How can you be sure? Trust me.

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Jace took a shaky breath. Okay, he nodded. They

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slowed their pace to a brisk walk until they

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came face to face with the beast. Jace covered

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his ears at the beast's furious roars. It stamped

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its feet, ready to pounce. What's the plan? Jace

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asked in a shaky voice. Hold up the mirror. He

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did as he was told. Elizabeth placed her hand

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over his and adjusted the position until the

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reflection held the beasts. She held up the heart

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quartz. A pink glow refracted off the mirror

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and landed on the beast. It cried and howled.

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The shadows engulfing the creature melted away.

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As it did, a child's voice emerged. No, no, no,

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no, no, please. The lust of the darkness evaporated,

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revealing a small boy with wild white hair. Tears

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streamed down his face as he turned. Please don't

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do this, he whimpered. I'm scared. Elizabeth

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knelt. It's okay to be scared, she said softly.

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That's why I'm here. I can protect you. Me, she

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looked back. And Jace. The boy cast his eyes

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over to Jace, who sat down beside him. I'm sorry,

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he whispered. The boy jumped into Jace's arms,

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and Elizabeth wrapped herself around them both.

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Soon they were joined by all the lost souls holding

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everyone close. The earth shook beneath them.

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Large concrete blocks landed all around them,

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but Elizabeth's soul held no fear. Nor victory.

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At last, she found relief. Tomorrow. The morning

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sun shed light onto a new day. One not lived

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before. Although life wasn't easier, it at least

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moved forward. One by one, lost souls found themselves

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again, not by casting or living in their shadows,

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but accepting both light and darkness live within.

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While the cycle provided easy comfort, change,

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however difficult, gave satisfaction. Elizabeth

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catalyzed the cycle's collapse, but it was the

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will of all who kept the walls from closing in

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once again. However, bravery blazes strong in

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their hearts, for they know what to do should

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the cycle return. We must break the pattern today,

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or the loop will repeat tomorrow. It's just so

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intelligently written with the looping and the

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repetition and the different approaches to how

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to get away, to slay or not slay the beast. Yeah,

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I loved it. I absolutely loved it. I could sit

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here and pontificate on that all day, but I'm

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not sure that anyone apart from me would want

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to hear that. But Maverick, if you're listening,

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that was a very, very strong piece of work. And

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I know lots of people have told you that already.

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both on Writing Battle in the debrief comments

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section and in real life. Real life? What's that?

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No idea. But I really hope that you're happy

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with what you've produced because it's great.

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Honestly, it is. It's a really, really strong

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story. The second story we have today deals with

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inevitability in a very, very different way.

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It's Alexis Hunter's winning story from... last

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year it's georgia valentine and the undoing of

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death now this was in the winter flash fiction

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battle 2024 and it was in the enemies to lovers

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genre with the other two prompts of executioner

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and lipstick what alexis has done here is tell

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the story from the perspective of death and you'd

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almost be forgiven for thinking that is not a

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cheery subject, well, you'd be surprised. It's

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a really, really lovely story, and Alexis has

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narrated this herself for us, and she's done

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a great job. I'm sure you're going to enjoy this,

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so I'm going to stop waffling now. Here is Alexis

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Hunter with her own story, Georgia Valentine

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and the Undoing of Death. There is a rhythm to

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my existence, an unseen metronome to my being.

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Upon my scroll appears a name, a place, a time.

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Tick. I step through the fabric of the universe

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to the place on the scroll, the precise moment

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of a mortal end. Tick. I execute my task, snipping

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the thread of life. Tick. Upon my scroll appears

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a name, a place, a time. Tick. The name on my

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list is Georgia Valentine. I step into her room

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through a door that isn't there and find that

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she isn't dead. Or dying. Or anything adjacent

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to either of those things. She is sitting at

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her vanity, hair the colour of slate, twisted

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into a perfect chignon. The wrinkles on her face

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show a life long lived. She is applying lipstick

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in a pearlescent shade of pink. A bottle of pill

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sits on the vanity. Quite full. A glass of water

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beside it, untouched. Am I early? This has never

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happened before. I check the scroll. There her

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name is, clear and shining. I check my internal

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compass. This is the place. I pull the chain

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-rattling timepiece from the folds of my robe.

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This is the time. I look at the woman. She places

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pouting lips. on the glass of the mirror and

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leaves a perfect pink kiss on her reflection.

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This is awkward. The door that was never there

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to begin with has gone and will not return until

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I have executed the reap soul step of this process

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and the new name part has happened. I'm not sure

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what to do. I move from feeling awkward to affronted.

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This woman is ruining my existence. I prod her

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gently with my scythe. albeit the pointy end,

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to see if that moves the process along. It does

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not. She whirls on me like a maniac, hairbrush

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brandished as a weapon, and bellows, Who are

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you? Good Lord, she can see me. They never see

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me. I come, snip, they're dead. I leave. A perfectly

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invisible existence. She narrows her eyes. What

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do you want? If it's a robbery, I've got nothing.

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If it's a sex thing, it's all dried up down there.

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You want nothing to do with it. She wraps the

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brush, frail arms moving windmill -like, to demonstrate

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her fierce intent. I am not okay with this. Answer

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me, pervert, she shouts, and I realise I have

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to speak. I've never had to speak. I don't like

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this at all. I'm deaf, I say, and I gesture to

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the robes in the scythe. But the words sound

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like a question, and that makes me furious. I

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clear my throat and project what I hope is the

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authority of my infinite office. Your time on

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this mortal plane has come to an end. I gesture

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to the bottle on the vanity, a hint that she

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should continue as planned. She lowers the brush

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a fraction, eyes drifting from me to the pills.

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Oh, she says, her voice soft with surprise. The

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thing is, I changed my mind. Changed your mind?

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I splutter. This woman! I don't think you understand.

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I've got a job to do here, and you haven't done

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your part of it. It's like an assembly line.

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You do your bit, then I do my bit. And voila,

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you're dead. Off to the great beyond with you.

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It's a woman's prerogative, she huffs. Death

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is not a matter of prerogatives. It is the fabric

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of the universe written by an unseen hand. I

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shake my scroll at her in frustration. Your name

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is written. That's it. I disappear the scroll

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and brush my robes together in a dusting -of

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-the -hands motion. She sighs, the fight leaving

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her in a whoosh of air. Her eyes search the infinite

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dark under the hood of my robes for understanding.

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I have no idea if she will find it in there.

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I've been so alone, she says, and the ache in

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her voice settles heavy on my chest in a way

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that is strange, yet familiar. Henry has been

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gone for twelve years. I have no friends left.

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They're all dead or in care homes. Too idle to

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know who I am. Today, I came home from shopping

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and I realised not a single person had spoken

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to me. Not one. Just for a moment, I thought...

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She sets her fearsome brush down by the bottle

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and picks up the lipstick. Then I saw this. It's

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called To Die For. And as I was putting it on,

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I decided that I shouldn't do what a lipstick

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says, because that's stupid. I perch on the edge

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of the stool, my robed arm extended around her

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shoulders. It is a ghost of a thing to her, but

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I think she appreciates the gesture. Then, for

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no reason that I can distinguish, I confess.

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Before you, I've never spoken to anyone or anything

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at all. She gasps in horror. Not a single soul?

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If I had a face, I might have grinned, a wry

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and unhappy sort of gesture. In my infinite existence,

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Georgia Valentine, you are the first mortal who

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has ever laid eyes upon me. What about immortal?

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I shake my head, the hood of my robes silently

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swaying. Never met one. Don't know if there are

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any. Fascinating, she says, and she smiles. It

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is warm and lovely, framed into dyeful pink.

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What's your name? Death? I'm not calling you

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that. It's ghastly. How do you feel about Frank?

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I have no specific objection to Frank. Excellent.

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Well, Frank, do you have somewhere you need to

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be? I check my scroll and shrug. Not until you

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decide to die. She smiles again and heads for

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the door. I'm making cheese on toast. And you're

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going to tell me all about yourself. After that,

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maybe I'll reconsider that dying thing. Maybe

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it's fine, I say, and follow her through a door

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that is there. Wasn't that something? Wasn't

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it great? Alexis does such a good job there.

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She touches on some really important and emotional

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topics such as aging and grief and dying and

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how a person chooses to die and gets us to examine

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them just with the most wonderful little story

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about death personified coming to chat to an

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old lady. Now that description I've just given

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there. does not do it justice but it's something

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a really good writer can do where they can take

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something nice and simple and within that simple

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structure get the reader or in this case the

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listener to really really think about stuff and

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yeah it's excellent it's a really strong story

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and i can see why it won well thank you for joining

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us on this episode of one more short story with

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me chris fullwell We'll see you next time